Tuesday, 4 August 2015

Recount writing

WALT write a recount about an idea we had in our writers notebook.

 I was At home I was sitting on the couch doing nothing, until my sister got an idea. Do you want to 
know the idea! Okay then it is roasting marshmallows! How yummy is that, anyways back to the 
story. my sister and I got two toothpicks a bag of marshmallows and a candle. My sister lit the 
candle and then we begun roasting marshmallows. My sister showed me how to roast the marshmallows without burning my fingers my sister has done this in girl guides before so she knows what to do. The marshmallows were bubbling and it turned into fire  then I blew the fire out. Every single time when the fire came I would always blow it out and sometimes the fire wouldn't go away. It tasted gooey and delicious at the same time. The smoke smells nice, if you smell my house you would know that my sister and I were roasting marshmallows. After we finished roasting we packed away our stuff and then after that I changed into my pj's and went back to the living room lay down on the couch with my waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrm blanket! Because it was so cold I snuggled up in my blanket and I watched TV. I was watching until dinner time do you want to know what it was. A burger with fish, yeah really, fish. Anyway I finished dinner then I had warm milk (like always) then I brushed my teeth and then I went to my warm bed ah goodnight oh and THE END. 

Success Criteria - Co constructed

we need our plan beside us to look at our ideas
make sure it's true and it makes sense
put it in the right order
use descriptive words - e.g. enormous, giant, speechless, flabbergasted etc
proof reading ask someone else to read it
use a dictionary / thesaurus - make your writing more interesting to draw the reader in
use punctuation
use the highlighter strategy - gold for goal and pink for think